Photoshopped Pic-Am I on the right track?

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I know the focus isnt sharp, its tough with a point and shoot and quick fish, Im more asking about color and balance shifts. Am I headed in the right direction?

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P.S.'d - Dodge/Burn and Color Levels, thats it.

 

[asl4me76]

When editing the photos, try to get them as close to what you see with your eyes.